The Quiet Riot(Original song)

[TecHniCoLoR_MX]

So im not the best lyrical writer, i would very much appreciate it if anybody could give me feedback about these lyrics im posting. I started writing this when Occupy <City names here> started. Have not finished it yet though.


When you look out
At the buildings of white
What do you see?

I see chaos
swirling down
to the ground
This is where we are
How did we get so/this far?

I'm tired of the riots
Cant they go quiet in the night?
Or disappear without a trace
But that won't happen
at this pace

The Quiet Riot
Spread the word
Of the bird
Up in the clouds
that's where i want to be

So thats what i have so far. Kind of a rough draft, not as good as my other work. Give me your imput and suggustions please!